I was with Boon today talking about producing a TL;DR version of the book case.
There are 2 Modes.
First is to narrate it like a story, a fight between light and darkness. Here comes the hero, glories but with problems presented and difficulty overcame. Let's call it Story Mode.
The second is to tell it like a hurried-manager style. Imagine a CTO of a big bank whose mind is fixed to a problem-solution pattern. If her daughter says "the pretty patio is painted pink", instead of imagining a beautiful lazy afternoon with tea and book, he would ask, "my darling, what is the problem of your solution?" She would shyly admit that the teacher asks a sentence to be made with the letter P. 𝑝𝑢𝑓𝑓! The beautiful story is gone and here comes the hash reality. Such a CTO would read the first page, expect a problem-solution pattern, and use the 1st page as "Take-away". Since it is already Taken-away, there is no need to actually read the rest 7 pages. Any story untold after 1st page will never be heard. Let's call it "Solution Mode".
We feel that our reader is closer to the second mode, so we renovated the first page to make it a "take-away", separate it into 2 columns, "The problem" vs "The solution".
Have a look and tell me which version would work better. Only the 1st and 2nd page differs.
The story mode:Nozama Story.pdf (1.7 MB)
The Solution mode (the V.S. mode): Nozama Solution.pdf (1.7 MB)